haiku by Harald Darer
 
  Umringt von felsigen Riesen 
  Duftender Thymian verzaubert die Luft 
  Klöster löschen die Sonne 
 
  commentary by the teachers
 
In the first line, "felsigen Riesen" is definitely better than "riesigen Felsen". The third line is also original. The second line however could come from an advertising brochure. Please try again to evoke the sense of smell using different words.