haiku
by
Harald Darer
Umringt von felsigen Riesen
Duftender Thymian verzaubert die Luft
Klöster löschen die Sonne
commentary by the teachers
In the first line, "felsigen Riesen" is definitely better than "riesigen Felsen". The third line is also original. The second line however could come from an advertising brochure. Please try again to evoke the sense of smell using different words.