haiku by Manuela Richter
 
  pere-Lachaise quiet waits  
  resting under the flowers 
  summer time is gone. 
 
  commentary by the teachers
 
The form is not correct. (Please check the lecture on haiku for more information about this.)Rewrite it.

incorrect? / nikolamitk / 14.10.2003 11:55
sorry, renée + sabine, i have been reading several comments from you that say "the form is not correct", and i don't always understand. in this example: i would pronounce "per - la - chais - quiet - waits" and so on - so it can not be about the 5 -7 -5 - syllabes where the fault is. what is it then? please explain ...
AW: incorrect? / gadsden_scholl / 15.10.2003 11:54
"Quiet" is a two syllable word, therfore the first line has 6 and not 5 syllables.