haiku by karin maehner
 
  Welke Hauptallee 
  ihre Hand auf seinem Arm 
  ein Kind läuft voraus 
 
  commentary by the teachers
 
This revision is an improvement! The first line especially is good, but the whole image is so trite somehow: the "happy family" walking in Prater in the autumn. Sabine feels that the first line raises expectations that are not fulfilled by the rest of the poem. How about one more version?