| haiku by Elis Rotter | |
| kastanienreis | |
| vom sturm herabgeschleudert | |
| auf dem trottoir | |
| commentary by the teachers |
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Tempest in a teapot? Orkan in Wien?Vielleicht zu dramatisiert: "herabgeschleudert". It isn't clear that you are a child here, therefore the catastrophe seems overly exaggerated. Please rework.
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